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Typo / Grammar
Mark and the Witch of the Deep Forest weird sentence
ID: 1115Status: In ProgressVersion: Date: March 15, 2020Product: Trails from Zero

On page 3, the sentence "When the credibility of Mark's stories are disputed, he gets angry." is odd in context. First of all, it's not clear that "he" is referring to Mark instead of Ron; second, the tense is inconsistent with the rest of the paragraph; third, the verb "are" doesn't match the subject "credibility". Possible rephrasing: "Mark got angry whenever the credibility of his stories was disputed."

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